Don't get me wrong. I'm no expert on movies too. But I understand the
purpose of a good narrative. I like that you want to get your fresh idea
out into the public. But it lacks the understandings of why people make
art.You are still very young and inexperienced. If this is your passion,
please educate yourself on why great art, novels and movies are made. I
found my enlightenment in the documentary of The Last of Us perhaps looking
there will help you control your raw ideas. Remember movies are the same as
any other form of art, in that they make statements about life. Best of
Luck to you. - Justin Colon